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Posted: 26 June 2004 09:29 PM   [ Ignore ]
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I’m not sure how to rewrite the following sentences, who can help me?
1) It was such a beautiful day that I decided to go sunbathing on the beach.
Such….....

2) Once Jason had agreed, they went ahead with the plan.
Only…..

3) I had no idea that she was planning a surprise party for me.
Little….....

4) The supermarket was so busy that we postponed doing the shopping.
So…......

Thank you in advance very much- Kasia from a rainy country smile

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Posted: 27 June 2004 02:17 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 1 ]
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[quote author=Kasia25 link=board=grammar;num=1088332180;start=0#0 date=06/27/04 at 06:29:40]I’m not sure how to rewrite the following sentences, who can help me?
1) It was such a beautiful day that I decided to go sunbathing on the beach.
Such….....

2) Once Jason had agreed, they went ahead with the plan.
Only…..

3) I had no idea that she was planning a surprise party for me.
Little….....

4) The supermarket was so busy that we postponed doing the shopping.
So…......

Thank you in advance very much- Kasia from a rainy country smile


First of all, none of the above need rewriting. They’re all perfectly good as they are. But if you just want to explore different ways of saying the same thing, then:

1. I decided to go to the beach and sunbathe, as it was such a beautiful day.

2. Having received Jason’s agreement, they went ahead with the plan.

3. The surprise party she was planning for me was completely unexpected.

4. We postponed doing the shopping because the supermarket was so busy.

There are probably dozens of variations. Mostly, I prefer the originals. smile

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Posted: 27 June 2004 03:07 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 2 ]
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3) I had no idea that she was planning a surprise party for me.
Little….....

Are you supposed to start the sentence with the new word? Then I would write something like this:

Little did I know that she was planning a surprise party for me.

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Posted: 27 June 2004 03:10 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 3 ]
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[quote author=Kasia25 link=board=grammar;num=1088332180;start=0#0 date=06/27/04 at 06:29:40]I’m not sure how to rewrite the following sentences, who can help me?
1) It was such a beautiful day that I decided to go sunbathing on the beach.
Such….....

2) Once Jason had agreed, they went ahead with the plan.
Only…..

3) I had no idea that she was planning a surprise party for me.
Little….....

4) The supermarket was so busy that we postponed doing the shopping.
So…......

Thank you in advance very much- Kasia from a rainy country smile

I agree with PW that the originals are the best in shape.  But this must be an exercise on inversion-inducing words and aesthetic doesn’t weigh too much in pedagogical grammar.  Yeah, I have been through this (I think).  Caution, irresponsible opinion ahead.  Hold fast to your grammar books.
1. Such was the beauty of today’s weather that. . .
2. Only after Jason had agreed, did they go ahead with the plan.
3. Little did I imagine that. . .
4. So busy was the supermarket that. . .

Flam, who did this by the book
but expects to be corrected.

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Posted: 27 June 2004 03:44 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 4 ]
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Poor Kasia!
You are living the nightmare of the EFL pedagogy and syllabi that force us to teach structures that are little-used in writing and even littler-used  ;) in speaking.
I agree with Flam’s (may I call you Flam?) sentences and his pronouncement.
Good luck!

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Posted: 27 June 2004 03:54 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 5 ]
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RK: (may I call you Flam?)

Of course, RK.  Please do so until my nasty twin Flim raises his head.

Flim/Flam who thank you for your verification.

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Posted: 27 June 2004 04:11 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 6 ]
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Flaminius:

But this must be an exercise on inversion-inducing words…

Good that you noticed finally! Man, have you already forgotten your FCE? ;D

If I were Kasia I would have felt flummoxed by your answers arguing how beautiful the original sentences are! Who cares about them when the examinators will only look at the reshaped phrase? ;D

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Posted: 27 June 2004 05:37 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 7 ]
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[quote author=Flaminius link=board=grammar;num=1088332180;start=0#5 date=06/27/04 at 12:54:36]
Please do so until my nasty twin Flim raises his head.

Don’t tell me, your nasty twin is the reincarnation of George C. Scott! (Check out the move, "The Flim-Flam Man" with said George and Michael Sarrazin) :D

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Posted: 27 June 2004 02:34 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 8 ]
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If I were Kasia I would have felt flummoxed by your answers arguing how beautiful the original sentences are! Who cares about them when the examinators will only look at the reshaped phrase?  

Well, shoot, my bad. It’s been so long since I encountered a true "examinator" that I simply took the question at face value. Sorry if that caused confusion, Kasia.

Such is my sorrow that I may wimper uncontrolably. Or perhaps not. smile

I think I get it now:

Such was the beauty of the day that…
Only when Jason had agreed (to it) did we…
Little did I know that…
So busy was the supermarket that…

My only concern is that that’s not the way people speak. Grammar doesn’t rule. Communication does.

- PW
Who doesn’t like examinators much

 

 

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Posted: 27 June 2004 06:11 PM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 9 ]
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Katy, you are certainly not doing my homework as I’m not at school any more. I’m preparing for an English exam by myself, I’m doing many tests and exercises and that’s why I have so many questions for you. Is it wrong?
Thank you for help and greetings smile

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Posted: 28 June 2004 02:58 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 10 ]
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Thank you everybody and what’s finally the right answer to my question? I really have to rewrite these sentences with the words that are suggested.
Thank you very much for help smile

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Posted: 28 June 2004 03:06 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 11 ]
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How about this?

1) It was such a beautiful day that I decided to go sunbathing on the beach.
Such a beautiful day it was that I decided to go sunbathing on the beach.
2) Once Jason had agreed, they went ahead with the plan.
Only when Jason had agreed did they go ahead with the paln.
3) I had no idea that she was planning a surprise party for me.
Little did I think that she was planning a surprise party for me.
4) The supermarket was so busy that we postponed doing the shopping.
So busy was the supermarket that we postponed doing the shopping.

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Posted: 30 June 2004 02:53 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 12 ]
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Oh what the heck… Why not have some fun with the examinators?!

Kasia—these are merely in jest, and for your reading pleasure!  (or displeasure!) raspberry  ::)   ;D

1. Such a beautiful day it was that sunbathing on the beach I decided to go.

2. Only ahead with the plan they went, once Jason had agreed.

3. Little surprise that she had no idea for planning a party for me.

4. So super was the market that we postponed doing our shopping until we figured out where to meet and regroup when we were done!

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Posted: 30 June 2004 04:28 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 13 ]
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Timothy, have you been taking grammar lessons from Yoda?

- Garzo.

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Posted: 30 June 2004 04:37 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 14 ]
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Garzo, model Yoda on someone real, they did… More to me there is than meets the eye! wink

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Posted: 30 June 2004 04:48 AM   [ Ignore ]   [ # 15 ]
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Kasia,
To answer your question as to what you should use, I still stand by Flam on this one.
Your examiners will want you to begin the sentences as you originally listed.
Regardless of how artificial it may sound, that is what they are looking for.
As you know, you always need to give the examiners what they are looking for in order to score well on exams.
We can always decide upon what would sound better to a native speaker’s ear at another time.
Knock ‘em dead (not literally!) on your exam.
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